This morning Miss Burt announced room 16 would be going on the playground. I was thinking, "what?!" since it wasn't even lunch time, but then she told us we had to describe our playground experience. I slid down some shiny silver bars, and this is what I came up with:
I could taste air gushing into my mouth. Everything looked like a blur except for what was right in front of me. I somehow smelled fresh seawater! The sound in my ears reminded me of the soft whisper of the wind. I felt the smoothness of the metal poles on my hands. It felt like I was flying like a bird.
By Lucy.
On the spinners I felt like a spinning top. I heard nothing whizzing wind rushing past my face and into my ears. The spinning top felt warm because it had been used a lot. Suddenly, the spinning top stopped, but I will never stop spinning inside!
By Tori.
This morning Room 16 went to the playground. I chose the top of the monkey bars, and by top I mean TOP! My mouth tasted dry. I felt like a monkey swinging through the trees. It felt exhilarating flinging myself down from the tree.
By Freeman.
I could hear the wind wooshing past my head. My mouth tasted dry like some small indians in my mouth had just burnt a germ to the stake. My hands felt sore from the cold steel bars. I thought I was going to crash. I like the flying fox.
By Henderikus.
As I swing around on the helicopter blades I feel like a monkey in a tree. I can smell kids sweat on the bars. I hear kids running and screaming like mad. I think if I stayed swinging for too long, I would be sick. The blades felt cold like iced tea. I felt very happy like a bird after it had eaten a worm.
By Tim.
6 comments:
Hi Lucy,
your writing is very, very, very, descriptive. I like how you described things using your 5 senses. My favorite description of yours is the one about how everything
looked like a blur to you. I also quite like your little introduction up the top.
From your friend
Loimata
Hi Lucy !
I like your writing ! It sounds so sincere ! Miss Burt is a clever teacher. She knows that you can write well from experience !
Mrs. She
nice work freeman i like how you described every thing.
To freeman
Good descriptive and do you feel like a monkey in the trees.From Tim.
Dear Lucy,Tori,Hendi and Tim
You guys wrote a really catchy playground expeirience,bydescribing what it felt like,smelt like and sounded like.
Boun'jour
Hey everybody I loooooooooove your dicriptive writing, and i can'nt wait for more. I can emagine myself in each and everyone of you private wordls. Keep it up.
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